User blog:Poisoon140/The Cyan Fanon (Part 2)

Hello. This is the part two to my first fanon. I left off when Beth, Frank, Harold, and Mary went to Beth's igloo, only to see 5 robbers.

Chapter 2
They noticed the robbers right away, and Beth almost fainted. Then Beth chased the robbers with a pan, but the robbers were too fast! Then the robbers took Harold and put him in a sack! But luckily, Harold could bite through the (very thin) sack with his newly grown teeth. But once he bit out, he notied that he was already in the robbers' car! Then the robbers took off, and Harold had to make a choice. Either jump out, or give up. Fourtunately, Beth was right next to the car in her car! Frank was with her, too. "Hop out, I will catch you!", Frank called out. Harold thought for a moment, and then he decided to jump! "AAAAH!!!", Harold cried. But he was safely caught, and they started back home. But then Frank noticed something. "Wait, weren't there 5 robbers? Because there are 4 in their car.", he told Beth. Then they realized that they left Mary home, and they sped back faster than a rocket! Then, they saw the house a wreck, and even worse, Mary wasn't anywhere! Then they all started crying. But then, a miracle happened! They heard Mary! But sadly, Mary was only saying things like "WELP!" and crying, and they all knew that. It was coming from upstairs, so they went there. Then they saw that the 5th robber wasn't any ordinary robber, but the evil Pookie Hater Lord (aka PHL)! And he had Mary in a (very thick) sack and a giant firey dragon! "MWA HA HA HA HA HA!", PHL laughed. "Become my slaves or this fire dragon will eat your pookie!". Mary found peekholes and looked down. "DWAGON!!!", Mary cried. The End (of chapter 2)!

So, what do you think on a scale of 1 to 10, same rating scale rules as in chapter 1.